Drama Project - Pitching Session

Having pitched our film in a tutorial session, based upon my initial treatment, I thought I'd post some thoughts. I felt that the storyline came off well, and that the themes were easy to explain. Thanks to some character development carried out beforehand I was able to vividly describe the relationships between characters, particularly the protagonist and his sister. One important piece of feedback was an uncertainty about the strength of our idea to include a cosmonaut character in the film. We didn't feel, however, that there needed to be too much of an explanation in the film about this element; after all, why does any character appear in any film? In order to make the appearance less jarring, we plan to include some props and set dressings in the protagonist's bedroom in the first scene, in order to establish the idea of a cosmonaut as part of his mind. Then when he hallucinates, it can be seen as a representation of his unconscious mind.